I thought the chess thing was almost too obvious. Not that you shouldn't make it obvious -- but I think revealing it later in the story would reall...(more)
Hey -- keep it coming. As the character says himself, this is gonna be a great response to the typical "poor farm boy suddenly wakes up with mad sw...(more)
This is funny. It read fast an easily.
However, it may be a bit too obvious for my taste. It's very clear who the characters are based off ...(more)
This could be a challenge idea -- write a story using just dialogue. You do a good job of it, Nyki -- it's not easy to make it clear who's speaking...(more)
This is funny and succint. The dead-end reasoning in the last paragraph is a good way to end.
Two tiny things: I don't think "razor" in Occ...(more)
